Saturday, February 10, 2018

Deep POV - Part 2

by Elva Cobb Martin

If you missed Part 1, get it here

Deep POV makes our writing vibrate with emotion--like this snapshot from Gone with the Wind

DPOV often eliminates most problems with show/don't tell and even italics.

 A short booklet that has been a great help to me in mastering DPOV is Rivet Your Readers with Deep Point of View by Jill Elizabeth Nelson. Find it on Amazon here:

Here are some quick pointers from Jill:

♦  Never say he/she thought, felt, knew, wondered, realized, decided. 
Simply write what it is.

    Wrong: He understood how much this would mean to her. He knew       she’d be worried.
    Right: This would mean a  lot to her. She would be worried.

♦  Don’t name the emotion, describe it instead. 
     Shallow: Jealousy flashed through me.
     Deep: Heat boiled my insides. If that wimp could win a trophy, where was mine?

(Check out The Emotion Thesaurus by Angela Ackerman for great help in describing emotions.

♦  Describe physical effects on the body: 
         Anger: His hands formed into fists.
       Nervous: Sweat popped out on his palms. His throat closed.

♦  Ditch Prepositional telling phrases (of, with, in)
     Shallow: Desiree’s skin prickled with pleasant excitement.
      Deep: Shadows deepened. The place reeked of ancient secrets.   Desi's skin prickled.

♦  Don’t use he/she saw, tasted, smelled, heard. Simply state what he saw, tasted, smelled or heard.
     Shallow: He could see the tip of the dog’s nose peeking out of the                            closet.
     Deep: The tip of the dog’s nose peeked out of the closet.
     Shallow: He tasted bile. 
     Deep: Bile rose in his throat.

Do you have some tips to help master DPOV? Please leave a comment and share on your social media if this blog helped you.

Be blessed,

Elva Cobb Martin is vice-president of the South Carolina Chapter of American Christian Fiction Writers. She is a former school teacher and a graduate of Anderson University and Erskine College. She has two inspirational novels contracted with Lighthouse Publishers of the Carolinas. Summer of Deception, a contemporary romantic suspense, and an historical romance, In a Pirate’s Debt. Both have spent time on Amazon’s 100 Best Sellers List for Women’s Religious Fiction. Decision, Charisma, and Home Life have carried Elva's articles. Jim Hart of Hartline Literary represents her. She and her husband Dwayne are semi-retired ministers. A mother and grandmother, Elva lives in Anderson, South Carolina. Connect with her on her web site,on Twitter; Facebook;  and Pinterest
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