Friday, August 24, 2018

Show Don't Tell Descriptions - Part 4 Body Movements

by Elva Cobb Martin


Today I want to share some show, don't tell descriptions for body movements that will make our readers see what we are trying to describe.


He lifted her chin with his hand and gazed into her eyes. (Look at Gable's romantic body movement with Scarlet)


He put his hand on her shoulder in a possessive gesture.

His sudden iron grip on her wrist halted her flight.

Her slender hands twisted in her lap.

He slammed his hand on the desk.

He held up a hand to silence her.

She turned away, her hands clenched at her sides.

He waved his hand in a gesture of dismissal.

He ran his hand over his cropped hair.

His hand lingered too long in its clasp.

He drove his fist into his palm.

He cupped the warm mug in his huge hand.

He pushed stray tendrils of hair from her cheek.

She bent her head and studied her hands.

With a tip of his head, he motioned her to the chair beside him.

She raised her chin with a cool stare in his direction.
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Thanks for stopping by. Can you add some show don't tell body movements to our list?  Please share by clicking on the small icons below.

Blessings,
Elva

Elva Cobb Martin is vice-president of the South Carolina Chapter of American Christian Fiction Writers. She is a former school teacher and a graduate of Anderson University and Erskine College. She has two inspirational novels published with Lighthouse Publishers of the Carolinas. Summer of Deception, a contemporary romantic suspense, and an historical romance, In a Pirate’s Debt. Both have spent time on Amazon’s 100 Best Sellers List for Women’s Religious Fiction. She has indie published a Bible study on Amazon, Power Over Satan, on the  believer's authority in Christ. Decision, Charisma, and Home Life have carried Elva's articles. Jim Hart of Hartline Literary represents her. She and her husband Dwayne are semi-retired ministers. A mother and grandmother, Elva lives in South Carolina. Connect with her on her web site http://www.elvamartin.com,on Twitter www.twitter.com/ElvaCobbMartin; Facebook http://www.facebook.com/elvacobbmartin;  and Pinterest https://www.pinterest.com/elvacobbmartin
 Link to her romance novels and non-fiction works on Amazon:http://amzn.to/2pOgVHI






Sunday, August 12, 2018

Show Don't Tell Descriptions - Part 3 Positive Facial Expressions

by Elva Cobb Martin

We've covered good show, don't tell descriptions in general and negative facial expressions. Today I want to share some positive facial expressions we can show versus tell.

A small smile of enchantment touched his lips.

She smiled in contentment, smelling the faint citrus scent of his after-shave.

A grin overtook his features.

A thoughtful smile curved her lips.

A smile found its way through the mask of uncertainty.

He gave her a smile that sent her pulses racing.

His face split into a wide grin.

His grin flashed briefly, dazzling against his olive skin.

A smile ruffled her mouth.

The glow of his look warmed her across the room.

Her smile was eager and alive with affection and delight.

With a slow, secret smile, she understood.

From my Summer of Deception romantic suspense after the first kiss: "As she walked up the steps to her room, a smile continued to curve Rachel's lips, still warm from his kiss.

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Thanks for stopping by. Do you have positive facial expressions you can add to our list? Please do share by clicking on the small icons below.

Blessings,
Elva 


Elva Cobb Martin is vice-president of the South Carolina Chapter of American Christian Fiction Writers. She is a former school teacher and a graduate of Anderson University and Erskine College. She has two inspirational novels published with Lighthouse Publishers of the Carolinas. Summer of Deception, a contemporary romantic suspense, and an historical romance, In a Pirate’s Debt. Both have spent time on Amazon’s 100 Best Sellers List for Women’s Religious Fiction. She has indie published a Bible study on Amazon, Power Over Satan, on the  believer's authority in Christ. Decision, Charisma, and Home Life have carried Elva's articles. Jim Hart of Hartline Literary represents her. She and her husband Dwayne are semi-retired ministers. A mother and grandmother, Elva lives in South Carolina. Connect with her on her web site http://www.elvamartin.com,on Twitter www.twitter.com/ElvaCobbMartin; Facebook http://www.facebook.com/elvacobbmartin;  and Pinterest https://www.pinterest.com/elvacobbmartin
 Link to her romance novels and non-fiction works on Amazon:http://amzn.to/2pOgVHI






Sunday, August 5, 2018

Show, Don't Tell Descriptions - Part 2 Negative Facial Expressions

by Elva Cobb Martin

Show, don't tell is so important for us writers that I keep adding information to my file and studying books on the subject.

Here are some favorite negative facial expressions I've noted  from my research or composed.

His face turned to marble as he cast a searing glance toward his unwanted passenger.    (Do you think my description of Horatio Hornblower in this picture shows versus tells?)

His mouth spread into a thin-lipped smile.

His mouth pulled into a sour grin.

Offering her a distracted nod, he returned her smile.

Her smile held a touch of sadness.

She smile smoothly, betraying nothing of her annoyance.

His mouth took on an unpleasant twist.

He contradicted her with a smile that set her teeth on edge.

A satanic smile spread across his thin lips.

She pasted on a smile of nonchalance.

His face became a marble effigy of contempt.

The familiar mask descended once again.

His expression held a note of mockery.

Her features tightened and her eyes turned hard.

She looked away fast at the sight of his scowl.

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Have you some negative expressions that show, don't tell to add to our list? Great facial descriptions are great to edit into your second draft. Thanks for stopping by. Please share by clicking on the small icons below.

Blessings,
Elva Martin

Elva Cobb Martin is vice-president of the South Carolina Chapter of American Christian Fiction Writers. She is a former school teacher and a graduate of Anderson University and Erskine College. She has two inspirational novels published with Lighthouse Publishers of the Carolinas. Summer of Deception, a contemporary romantic suspense, and an historical romance, In a Pirate’s Debt. Both have spent time on Amazon’s 100 Best Sellers List for Women’s Religious Fiction. She has indie published a Bible study on Amazon, Power Over Satan, on the  believer's authority in Christ. Decision, Charisma, and Home Life have carried Elva's articles. Jim Hart of Hartline Literary represents her. She and her husband Dwayne are semi-retired ministers. A mother and grandmother, Elva lives in South Carolina. Connect with her on her web site http://www.elvamartin.com,on Twitter www.twitter.com/ElvaCobbMartin; Facebook http://www.facebook.com/elvacobbmartin;  and Pinterest https://www.pinterest.com/elvacobbmartin

 Link to her romance novels and non-fiction works on Amazon:http://amzn.to/2pOgVHI






Friday, July 13, 2018

Show Don't Tell Descriptions - Part 1

by Elva Cobb Martin

As authors we have to keep sharpening our show don't tell skills. When I read, I take notes on examples of good descriptions that show us rather than tell us. This helps us master the technique. 

See if the sentences/phrases below help inspire you. They are my descriptive notes from a novel of a New York Times bestselling mystery author. This is one of the reasons she's enjoyed by so many readers! Can you SEE what she is describing?

The air was hot and heavy, as if it had already been breathed, and tasted faintly stale. (at a grave yard during funeral)

She looked tired and rumpled.

His voice lifted as he warmed to the subject.

He loved inflicting pain, that she knew as surely as any animal knows its predator by sight and smell.

She forced a smile and feared it might be more like bared teeth.

A look of venom hardened her face before she mastered it and ironed it out.

Charlotte knew exactly when the woman caught sight of Jacob. Her face changed. The full lower lip came forward, and the skin tightened across her cheeks.

Her voice, when it came, was as brittle as splintered glass.

Do these examples inspire you? With slight changes we may be able to use these great examples of show/don't tell descriptions.
And also come up with new ones.


Here are some descriptions of mine:


From Summer of Deception after the hero Luke Barrett has come back to God and had his faith restored. This is how I described what he felt later.

"As Luke walked across the lawn, the grass appeared greener, the flowers of the garden path more brilliant. A harmony filled his inner being, and he started to whistle."


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Here's part of a scene from In a Pirate's Debt as the hero, Captain Bloodstone, (ancestor of Luke Barrett above) wrestles with the enemy in his dungeon cell on the eve of his proposed execution.

"Fury singed his mind and body. If he could just get his hands around Roger Poole's neck. That murderous thought brought others and Lucas fell into a hellish, demonic wrestling that lasted hours...Finally, exhausted and weary with the visions and the damp darkness about him, Lucas fell to his knees and cried out to God for deliverance from his anger and his unforgiveness. The response came swiftly, peacefully, like a gentle hand on his head. He looked up and saw a thin ray of sunlight filter down from the small barred window announcing morning."


Thanks for stopping by. Can you give me some good descriptive phrases or sentences that inspire you to add to my file?  Please click on the small links below to share this blog.

Be blessed today is my prayer for you,
Elva


Elva Cobb Martin is vice-president of the South Carolina Chapter of American Christian Fiction Writers. She is a former school teacher and a graduate of Anderson University and Erskine College. She has two inspirational novels published with Lighthouse Publishers of the Carolinas. Summer of Deception, a contemporary romantic suspense, and an historical romance, In a Pirate’s Debt. Both have spent time on Amazon’s 100 Best Sellers List for Women’s Religious Fiction. She has indie published a Bible study on Amazon, Power Over Satan, on the  believer's authority in Christ. Decision, Charisma, and Home Life have carried Elva's articles. Jim Hart of Hartline Literary represents her. She and her husband Dwayne are semi-retired ministers. A mother and grandmother, Elva lives in South Carolina. Connect with her on her web site http://www.elvamartin.com,on Twitter www.twitter.com/ElvaCobbMartin; Facebook http://www.facebook.com/elvacobbmartin;  and Pinterest https://www.pinterest.com/elvacobbmartin


 Link to her romance novels and non-fiction works on Amazon:http://amzn.to/2pOgVHI






Saturday, July 7, 2018

Do These Openings Draw You Into the Story?

by Elva Cobb Martin


This busy summer is proving difficult to keep at my normal writing speed. July in South Carolina is very hot, and this year, also humid. I seem to keep a film of perspiration down my back with minimal activity, even with good A/C. (Notice we southern belles DO NOT sweat. We perspire.) LOL

BUT I WILL NOT GIVE IN OR UP whether sweating or perspiring! Today I am going to give you a breakdown of what I am working on and some openings. Taking stock like this, keeps my writing goals from wilting in this summer heat. Jerry B. Jenkins says even if you can't write at the moment, keeping your goals in mind will make your subconscious work on your project while you're trying to get back to it. 

Here are my three current projects, two fiction, one NF:


1) An inspirational historical romance series set in the 1700's. I have completed the first draft of Book 1, Marisol, at 50,000 words and am starting back on the polishing which should raise the word count to about 70-75,000. I write my first drafts pretty fast to get the main plot points down, including the ending, then I go back and spit polish adding extra research and description before final editing. 


Chapter One    Cadiz, Spain, 1740  

Marisol Valentin pressed her tearful face on the neck of her beloved mare and tried to smother the ghastly metallic scent of blood in the corridor behind her. “Goodbye, dear Jada.” She forced her eyes from the sleek Andalusian and turned back toward the barn entrance.
Her breath strangled in her throat as she inched by the body of Diego Vargas, nobleman of Spain, sprawled in the passageway. She stumbled across the dark stable yard, and up the back stairs of the hacienda. Bursting into her bedchamber, she shoved the door closed, and leaned against it. Tears dripped onto her torn gown.
 “Oh, my lady.” Her maid dropped the camisole she was laying out on the bed. “What has happened?”
“Diego Vargas is dead. He came into the foaling barn after I went to check on Jada and         he . . .” Her voice cracked. She clenched her eyes to stop scenes of his brutal attack assailing her mind. “He’s ruined me.” Her lips trembled. “And I stabbed him to death with my sword.”

Carmela gasped and her hand flew across her mouth. “Madre de Dios!” 



2) A Christian Cozy Mystery

 Chapter 1
Aggie Perkins froze and gaped at the marble face of the man lying in the grass in the Meditation Labyrinth next to the chapel. A single bullet hole pierced his forehead. He was dead—dead as the proverbial door knob. He lay stretched out on his back with his hands folded across his chest.
     When she could breathe again, she stooped and groped for her purse she’d dropped on the lakeside footpath. She never took her eyes off the deceased she knew as Mr. Guy Jensen. Poor soul. Who would want to go and kill an old man like him? He kept to himself. Never bothered anyone. She shook her head and tried to remember the last time she’d witnessed to him about the hope in Christianity as she manned the registration desk at Lambton Inn. He cut such conversations off as fast as they began. Well, he certainly knew about the hereafter now.
     She sighed and then dug in her shoulder bag. Under a half dozen tissues, a too-pink tube of lipstick and sundry throat lozenges, she found her cell and dialed 911.
     “Sheriff’s office.” A female voice responded fast and interested.
      Aggie took a needed breath and willed her heart to quit rocking in her chest. She stumbled over the first words but cleared her throat and started again in her normal husky voice. “This is Aggie Perkins at Lake Juno Conference and Retirement Center. I’ve found a dead man, one of our residents, in our Meditation Garden. Is that new Deputy Dawson around?”
     “A dead man? Are you sure he’s dead?”
     “Of course I’m sure. I’ve seen a few deceased folks in my sixty years, young lady.” Then, not able to keep her eyes from returning to the terrible wound, she added with a shudder, “First time I’ve seen a bullet hole in a forehead, though.” 

Do these openings tempt you to read more? Feel free to critique.

3) A Healing School 4-week Class (Speaking and Writing)
The pastor of the church we attend asked me to do a four-week teaching on what the Bible says about healing. These free classes will be held on eight Wednesday nights for one hour starting July 11- August 29. Each class will last four weeks, then be repeated as other classes are also being offered and folks can sign up for two classes.
I love to share what the Bible says about our wonderful healing covenant in Christ! I believe all this study, preparing handouts, and sharing will evolve into another Bible study I will publish on Amazon. I already have Book 1 indie published on Amazon, Power Over Satan. Book 2 will most likely be Power Over Sickness. Would you join me in prayer for God to move mightily in those who need healing, to draw those who need to come, and for me to share exactly what He would have me share?

Thanks for stopping by. Want to share your writing projects and help keep them fresh? Did my fiction openings draw you into the story? Do leave a comment and share this blog by clicking on the small icons below.

Blessings,
Elva 

Elva Cobb Martin is vice-president of the South Carolina Chapter of American Christian Fiction Writers. She is a former school teacher and a graduate of Anderson University and Erskine College. She has two inspirational novels published with Lighthouse Publishers of the Carolinas. Summer of Deception, a contemporary romantic suspense, and an historical romance, In a Pirate’s Debt. Both have spent time on Amazon’s 100 Best Sellers List for Women’s Religious Fiction. She has indie published a Bible study on Amazon, Power Over Satan, on the  believer's authority in Christ. Decision, Charisma, and Home Life have carried Elva's articles. Jim Hart of Hartline Literary represents her. She and her husband Dwayne are semi-retired ministers. A mother and grandmother, Elva lives in South Carolina. Connect with her on her web site http://www.elvamartin.com,on Twitter www.twitter.com/ElvaCobbMartin; Facebook http://www.facebook.com/elvacobbmartin;  and Pinterest https://www.pinterest.com/elvacobbmartin

 Link to her romance novels and non-fiction works on Amazon:http://amzn.to/2pOgVHI





Friday, June 29, 2018

A Breakdown of Fiction Genres

by Elva Cobb Martin


For an author, genre is a style or category that controls what you write and how you write it. It is the blueprint for various types of stories.

Each genre has rules to follow and there can be sub-genres within genres. 


Genres are great because they fulfill reader  expectations. Like me, you probably buy certain books because you've enjoyed similar stories in the past.


Here is my simple breakdown of some popular fictional genres to help me keep them straight. You may know of others or group them differently.


Each genre has its own "blueprint" an author needs to research before writing in that category.


I will start my list with the two forever best-selling genres as far as I know-- Romance and Mystery,which are also my favorites.



1. Romance - stories about relationships between two people who fall in love. There are many sub-genres like Romantic Suspense, Historical Romance (with many period sub genres), Paranormal Romance. Most people love a love story!


2. Mystery/Crime/Suspense/Thriller - I lumped a lot of types in this one. Includes the "whodunits." There are many sub-genres like Police Procedural, Suspense/Thriller, Legal Thriller, Medical Thriller, Cozy Mystery.  Many people, including me, like to solve a mystery!


3. Action Adventure - This story puts the protagonist in physical danger with thrilling near misses and daring feats. It is fast-paced.


4. Speculative Fiction - These stories are created in worlds unlike our real world in certain important ways. They can overlap in science fiction, supernatural fiction, fantasy fiction, apocalyptic fiction.


5.  Young Adult - these are written, published and marketed to adolescent and young adults probably between the ages of 12-18. The stories can cross into fantasy and science fiction genres.


6. Women's Fiction - These plots are characterized by female central characters who face challenges and crises that have a direct relationship with gender.

7. Historical - These fictional stories take place against factual historical backdrops. Historical figures may be portrayed as fictional characters. Family sagas might be a sub genre.


8. Westerns - These books are specifically set in the old American West. Plot lines include survival, romance and adventure, and can include cowboys, mountain men, Indians, miners.

9. Horror/Paranormal/Ghost - These are high-pitched scary stories involving pursuit and escape. Occult is a sub genre.


10. Literary Fiction -This genre focuses on the human condition and is more concerned with the inner lives of characters and themes than plot. Some say this genre is hard to sell and continues to decline.


Thank you for stopping by. I bet you have another fiction genre to add somewhere in my list! Please leave your comment and  do share this blog by clicking on the small icons below.

Have a blessed, safe, July 4th!
Elva 

Elva Cobb Martin is vice-president of the South Carolina Chapter of American Christian Fiction Writers. She is a former school teacher and a graduate of Anderson University and Erskine College. She has two inspirational novels published with Lighthouse Publishers of the Carolinas. Summer of Deception, a contemporary romantic suspense, and an historical romance, In a Pirate’s Debt. Both have spent time on Amazon’s 100 Best Sellers List for Women’s Religious Fiction. She has indie published a Bible study on the  believer's authority in Christ, Power Over Satan. Decision, Charisma, and Home Life have carried Elva's articles. Jim Hart of Hartline Literary represents her. She and her husband Dwayne are semi-retired ministers. A mother and grandmother, Elva lives in South Carolina. Connect with her on her web site http://www.elvamartin.com,on Twitter www.twitter.com/ElvaCobbMartin; Facebook http://www.facebook.com/elvacobbmartin;  and Pinterest https://www.pinterest.com/elvacobbmartin

 Link to her romance novels and non-fiction works on Amazon:http://amzn.to/2pOgVHI




Friday, June 22, 2018

Villains - Part 2

by Elva Cobb Martin




Here are some questions you might want to ask yourself as you create a memorable villain like Petro in the Netflix series, Kurt Seyit and Sura.






What one or two positive traits does your villain possess?
 Petro is the perfect gentlemen on the outside, dresses well,  treats women well.

Maybe your villain is kind to animals or children.
Maybe he/she shows love for a family member, or helps a needy person.
Think of something that might help your readers sympathize early on with the villain.

What negative traits does your villain have?
Petro pretends to be the hero Kurt's best loyal friend, but is really disloyal, a liar, evil plotter, and murderer.

Have you foreshadowed your villain's evil core after showing his positive traits?

Is your villain obsessive compulsive in some way? 
   
Does he/she have some nasty habits?

What does your villain love or value more than anything?
Petro values position and riches.

What is your villain's goal and motive?
Petro wants to discredit the hero and he wants the heroine for himself.

He is motivated by hate for the hero and a past perceived wrong.

What lie does your villain believe?
Petro believes that if he can destroy Kurt, Sura will fall in love with him.

What has helped you create a good villain? Would love to hear your comments.

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Blessings,
Elva 



Elva Cobb Martin is vice-president of the South Carolina Chapter of American Christian Fiction Writers. She is a former school teacher and a graduate of Anderson University and Erskine College. She has two inspirational novels published with Lighthouse Publishers of the Carolinas. Summer of Deception, a contemporary romantic suspense, and an historical romance, In a Pirate’s Debt. Both have spent time on Amazon’s 100 Best Sellers List for Women’s Religious Fiction. Decision, Charisma, and Home Life have carried Elva's articles. Jim Hart of Hartline Literary represents her. She and her husband Dwayne are semi-retired ministers. A mother and grandmother, Elva lives in South Carolina. Connect with her on her web site http://www.elvamartin.com,on Twitter www.twitter.com/ElvaCobbMartin; Facebook http://www.facebook.com/elvacobbmartin;  and Pinterest https://www.pinterest.com/elvacobbmartin

 Link to her romance novels and non-fiction works on Amazon:http://amzn.to/2pOgVHI